WhiteFlame
Heartless
What can be lost, but is always with you?
Posts: 12
Age: 22
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Sin
Feb 7, 2016 0:51:14 GMT -5
Post by WhiteFlame on Feb 7, 2016 0:51:14 GMT -5
Player Username: WhiteFlame Current Character List:
Character Basics
Character Name: Sin Character Age: Unknown Character Race: "False" Heartless Character Gender: Unkown
About the Character
Character Personality : Unknown Character Appearance: A "False" Heartless with the posture of a human. Almost all black silhouette of darkness with a cloaked humanoid look. It has no antennae, nor is it hunched over. It is about 2x taller than a normal "Shadow Heartless". It's hands and feet are perfectly silhouetted by darkness. Battle Statistics
Character Position :Neutral Character Spells :[/b} Shadow Ball: Fires a softball sized ball of darkness for some damage. 3 per post. Character Abilities:
Shadow Form: Becomes a shadow and can move undetected, reemerging anywhere in the shadow. This ability is immediately canceled if the shadow cover is hit by light.
Eject: After falling to it's knees, a silhouette of a greatsword manifests itself sticking out of Sin's back. Can not be used by Sin, but can be used by other characters. Lasts for 2 posts. Character Forms/Command Styles:
Character Weapons: Hands, Feet, Head
Character Summons
Character Racial Ability : Immune to all forms of Darkness
Character Strengths: Dark Areas Character Weaknesses: Light Areas
Character History: Sin began in a black abyss. With heartless swarming around them, Sin merely adapted and mimicked it's surroundings. Realizing enough time had passed, they crawled out of the darkness. Shortly after departing the world, Sin met a group of travelers. Revealing it's identity, the group was sworn to secrecy. It would defiantly still be on trial. The group had brought it to the last place that anyone would look. The place where all this started. Would Sin see "it's" family? Or was it just there to destroy everything? Maybe it was their to seek the oh so common goal of taking Kingdom Hearts for itself?
Writing Portion
Sample Post : Not so long ago, a battle took place on an uncharted world. After quite an emotional turn of events, some people feel into an origin of darkness. The people left standing were upset to have lost so much. One of these people were sent to prison for crimes of mass genocide. This person escaped that prison. The thing is is that they were never THE person. So this Shadow, this Sin finally made it's way out of the Darkness. For Revenge? Maybe, no one knows what this things motives are, or whether it's good or evil. Maybe it is seeking to make Kingdom Hearts into a conduit of darkness.
Kingdom Hearts
1. Which form will you choose?
The power of the warrior
The power of the defender
The power of the mystic
2. What is most important to you?
Being number one
Friendship
My prized possessions
3. What do you want out of life?
To see rare sights
To broaden my horizons
To be strong
4. What are you afraid of?
Getting old
Being different
Being indecisive
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Sin
Feb 10, 2016 15:10:55 GMT -5
Post by Raphael on Feb 10, 2016 15:10:55 GMT -5
First off, the history is too short. You need 10 FULL sentences of history, 2-4 word sentences don't count. Also, you need to have something Kingdom Hearts related in the history.
Technically, even though he's a being of darkness, the race is still Heartless, if that's what you were going for. Otherwise, you're gonna need to explain why darkness is a race either in racial ability or -more preferably- the history.
There's not a lot of stuff to review for abilities or spells, so this should be all you need to edit in the profile. Please reply after you've made your changes.
3 days to edit.
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WhiteFlame
Heartless
What can be lost, but is always with you?
Posts: 12
Age: 22
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Sin
Feb 10, 2016 23:45:53 GMT -5
Post by WhiteFlame on Feb 10, 2016 23:45:53 GMT -5
I really hope I fixed it, I haven't done this in a very long time...
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Sin
Feb 12, 2016 2:02:57 GMT -5
Post by Raphael on Feb 12, 2016 2:02:57 GMT -5
Hmm...After looking it over again, I realized you're still short on some appearance sentences. You need at least 5 minimum.
After that, you should be good to go.
3 days to edit.
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WhiteFlame
Heartless
What can be lost, but is always with you?
Posts: 12
Age: 22
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Sin
Feb 12, 2016 13:28:50 GMT -5
Post by WhiteFlame on Feb 12, 2016 13:28:50 GMT -5
Appearance Extended
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Sin
Feb 14, 2016 16:59:45 GMT -5
Post by Raphael on Feb 14, 2016 16:59:45 GMT -5
Okay, you're good to go, Approved! I'll post the profile code for if you want to update Sin later. Profile Code
[b]Player Username:[/b] WhiteFlame
[b]Current Character List:
[b][u]Character Basics[/u][/b]
[b]Character Name:[/b] Sin
[b]Character Age:[/b] Unknown
[b]Character Race:[/b] "False" Heartless
[b]Character Gender:[/b] Unkown
[b][u]About the Character[/u][/b]
[b]Character Personality :[/b] Unknown
[b]Character Appearance:[/b] A "False" Heartless with the posture of a human. Almost all black silhouette of darkness with a cloaked humanoid look. It has no antennae, nor is it hunched over. It is about 2x taller than a normal "Shadow Heartless". It's hands and feet are perfectly silhouetted by darkness.
[b][u]Battle Statistics[/u][/b]
[b]Character Position :[/b]Neutral
[b]Character Spells :[/b} Shadow Ball: Fires a softball sized ball of darkness for some damage. 3 per post.
[b]Character Abilities: [/b]
Shadow Form: Becomes a shadow and can move undetected, reemerging anywhere in the shadow. This ability is immediately canceled if the shadow cover is hit by light.
Eject: After falling to it's knees, a silhouette of a greatsword manifests itself sticking out of Sin's back. Can not be used by Sin, but can be used by other characters. Lasts for 2 posts.
[b]Character Forms/Command Styles:[/b]
[b]Character Weapons:[/b] Hands, Feet, Head
[b]Character Summons[/b]
[b]Character Racial Ability :[/b] Immune to all forms of Darkness
[b]Character Strengths:[/b] Dark Areas
[b]Character Weaknesses:[/b] Light Areas
[b]Character History:[/b] Sin began in a black abyss. With heartless swarming around them, Sin merely adapted and mimicked it's surroundings. Realizing enough time had passed, they crawled out of the darkness. Shortly after departing the world, Sin met a group of travelers. Revealing it's identity, the group was sworn to secrecy. It would defiantly still be on trial. The group had brought it to the last place that anyone would look. The place where all this started. Would Sin see "it's" family? Or was it just there to destroy everything? Maybe it was their to seek the oh so common goal of taking Kingdom Hearts for itself?
[b][u]Writing Portion[/u][/b]
[b]Sample Post :[/b] Not so long ago, a battle took place on an uncharted world. After quite an emotional turn of events, some people feel into an origin of darkness. The people left standing were upset to have lost so much. One of these people were sent to prison for crimes of mass genocide. This person escaped that prison. The thing is is that they were never THE person. So this Shadow, this Sin finally made it's way out of the Darkness. For Revenge? Maybe, no one knows what this things motives are, or whether it's good or evil. Maybe it is seeking to make Kingdom Hearts into a conduit of darkness.
[b][u]Kingdom Hearts[/u][/b]
[b]1. Which form will you choose?[/b]
The power of the warrior
The power of the defender
[font color="#e6de19"]The power of the mystic
[/font]
[b]2. What is most important to you?[/b]
Being number one
[font color="#e6de19"]Friendship
[/font]
My prized possessions
[b]3. What do you want out of life?[/b]
To see rare sights
[font color="#e6de19"]To broaden my horizons
[/font]
To be strong
[b]4. What are you afraid of?[/b]
Getting old
Being different
[font color="#e6de19"]Being indecisive
[/font]
[/b][/b]
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